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June 15th, 2017, 5:19 pm

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Hello guys!
I've decided to move Lynxstar's Tyranny from Figment back to Smackjeeves because the site is customizable and you guys can comment! :3

Also - I'm going to be making changes to this site because frankly, it's kinda old and bleh and needs a bit of touching up. I changed the template, put up a new cover, moved the story here, and I will be making a DIGITAL (thank goodness) map and I will be making a character page as well :3
Stay tuned!

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August 19th, 2017, 9:42 am

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June 15th, 2017, 5:45 pm

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Alright, I'll follow it there then lol

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June 15th, 2017, 6:19 pm

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Love it so far!
You write good warrior books.
You'll at least still post some doodles here though, right? I liked your cats.
And I'm working on my submission, sorry! Is there any room in Shadowclan?

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June 15th, 2017, 11:38 pm

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@WiispNightmare:
Thanks!
Well, I'll try, but now that I lost motivation to draw cats, they all turn out terrible xp
Also, I don't think there is, 'cause pretty much every warrior is ShadowClan has a big enough role that it would be easier to adjust the storyline to fit around a Thunder/Wind/RiverClan cat.

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June 19th, 2017, 3:10 pm

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Updated 6/19/17

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June 19th, 2017, 3:42 pm

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I'm sorry but ,-, I can't stand reading without pictures if I started reading with pictures

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June 19th, 2017, 3:45 pm

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@RealBoxTheEevee: oh :(
Well, I can't help ya there
Sorry

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June 26th, 2017, 1:52 pm

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Updated 6/26/17

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July 1st, 2017, 1:03 pm

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Darnit

I'm probably going to still call him Lynxstar in my head

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July 1st, 2017, 1:15 pm

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@WiispNightmare:
Haha yeah

How do you feel 'bout Coalblaze?

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July 1st, 2017, 3:36 pm

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@WildfireK: if this were Pokemon I would scream IT'S THE RAGE

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July 1st, 2017, 10:31 pm

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@WiispNightmare:
Yus poor Coalblaze

And Swampshine is scarred for life
Like literally

And also how is Lynxheart's thought process? Can you keep up (of course you can but is it boring to listen to his reasoning?)
Are the characters realistic? Any tips? Feedback? Favorite character? Opinion on Frostfire? Am I asking too many quetions?

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July 2nd, 2017, 10:02 am

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@WildfireK: His thought process seems confused, but so is he. It fits him, I think.
I can keep up if I'm awake (which I sometimes am not)
It's not boring, no.
Yes, there are a lot of realistic characters. I do think that you should maybe have a little more character development, I'm getting some mixed signals with Frost*star*.
I'm still wavering on a favorite character so far.
And no, you're not asking too many questions :3

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July 2nd, 2017, 11:21 am

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@WiispNightmare:
Confused, eh? I agree XD Lynxheart is a paranoid planner
Yaaay I uess that's good cause it means you have to pay attention to all the tiny things Lynxstar observes, which might give you a feeling a little bit like what Lynxheart is feeling


Keep in mind it's only the third chapter; the characters will get alot more in the future, but have you noticed the subtle change in Lynxheart's dialogue and thought process hiding behind Coalblaze's emotional collapse?
Meh, I bet you have, but yeah, just wanted to point that out

I like that you have mixed feelings about Froststar, 'cuz I think it helps to have a character who you're mixed about; it helps you habe an unbiased opinion on what they're doing and labels them as *Froststar* as a character, instead of *Good guy* or *Antagonist*


Alrighty then, I'll ask some more:
How similar are Froststar, Lynxstar, and Rubystar?
Why did Coalblaze explode like he did? Is it justified?
How do you feel about Swampshine?
Was it realistic, how Swampshine and Froststar made their move when they did?
Do you think StarClan is on Froststar or Lynxheart's side?
Do you ship Aspensong with Coalblaze? Hehe

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July 2nd, 2017, 11:42 am

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@WildfireK: oh goodness, I'll make sure and answer those as soon as I get back to my computer, because I can't remember all those to type out answers on the phone XD

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July 2nd, 2017, 11:44 am

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@WiispNightmare:
Hahaa

Lynxheart would remember those
But he'd totally forget everything else

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July 2nd, 2017, 11:46 am

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@WildfireK: well, I'm definitely not Lynxheart. I tend to not notice a lot of things that most people find important, and just the things that i find intriguing.

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July 2nd, 2017, 11:50 am

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@WiispNightmare:
Lol it sounds like my questions aren't intriguing XD

Okay dokie I am sort of the same - expect I pick up random things but forget things I actually try to remember

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July 2nd, 2017, 11:54 am

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@WildfireK: that's not what I said, WiFi! I'm also not good at memorizing a while load of information at once, ie your questions.
I notice DETAILS about people that I find intriguing, like how Swampshine doesn't try to help Lynx through this and simply expects a new leader to make it better, and doesn't take Lynx's feelings into account.

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July 2nd, 2017, 12:00 pm

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@WiispNightmare:
There are more ways to convey meaning other than speech hehehe but I know I was joking XD

Yeah Swampshine isn't the most sympathetic cat (odd for a medicine cat, eh?) It doesn't really help that Lynxheart is best friends with Coalblaze xp

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July 2nd, 2017, 12:07 pm

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@WildfireK: But what if Froststar turns out to be an awful leader?
What then, Swampshine?
A lot of people show their true faces after they come into power.

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July 2nd, 2017, 12:11 pm

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@WiispNightmare:
"What is a leader?

A leader isn't always right, but cats believe in them enough to follow them anyway. (Swampshine lol)

Frostfire is more of a leader than I am."

Hehehee

Froststar is pretty powerful/influential without being in power - more powerful thn Lynxheart. I wonder what happens when she has total power? What happened to Rubystar? What about Lynxstar? Hehehee

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July 2nd, 2017, 12:15 pm

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@WildfireK: Swampshine's blind loyalty is gonna come back and bite her on the butt, calling it now.
I liked Lynx better. He tried hard, and wants to get to know everyone, but maybe he is better off not being leader because it obviously puts far too much stress on him.
You shouldn't lose the people you love in your life just because of fame or power.

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July 2nd, 2017, 12:26 pm

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@WiispNightmare:

Ah haha I get it BLIND loyalty eh eh 'cause Coalblaze temporarily blinded her eh

But seriously who says it's blind? Nobody knows what Froststar said to her medicine cat; no one else was in the room where it happened

But look at it this way: Which leader would you choose? One who backs down from challenges diplomatically, ruining ShadowClan's rep to be safe, while ShadowClan's entire Clan maxim is to never back down from a challenge? Or one who actually represents ShadowClan and knows how to deal with threats (Rubystar)

Swampshine is shown to be a proud, independent cat who doesn't like backing down at all. I think by the way she rages as Lynxheart after the gathering she is really favoring Frotstar, despite the risk.
It's like picking a bullet or a poison. One will harm you very slowky but surely, and the other will kill you immediatley, but has a chance to miss.

But yeah I think I shouldn't have to explain. I should have made it obvious xp



Also, Lynxheart lost Coalblaze because he actually fell OUT of power, lol. He's a good leader, but not a good ShadowClan leader. If he was ThunderClan leader, everything would be fine.

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July 2nd, 2017, 12:31 pm

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@WildfireK: hahaha you did catch that one

Hm, I don't think it's that simple. Froststar seems like the kind of cat to start an all out war with all the clans, causing far too much bloodshed for my taste. (Says Comic, Silly likes violence.)
So which would be better, an all out war between all the clans that would end up with countless deaths and unrecoverable rifts, or someone who keeps his clan safe despite the consequences?
Pride comes before a fall.
That's the way I see it.
And Froststar might SEEM to care about her clanmates, but to me she sounds like someone who doesn't care about collateral damage.

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July 2nd, 2017, 1:07 pm

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@WiispNightmare:
Oooohh

Well, sit back and enjoy the ride, Wiisp,
'cause I have a few things planned

After all, Lynxheart, though he tried really hard to know everyone, was completly thrown off gaurd, because the cats he though were on his side... actually weren't.

But I will keep what you said in mind while I write. Thnks for the feedback! Really helpful :)


But for now, gotta go!


Also, who says that Swampshine cares about collateral damage? Hehe

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July 5th, 2017, 10:19 am

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@WildfireK: ahhhhhh RAAAAAGE CX
Poor Coalblaze. And Lynxheart. And me. From Lynxheart's point of view, I realize you've poisoned me against Froststar. Oops, I shouldn't have fallen for that. She deserves a chance.
Maybe you should switch perspective, to change it up :D

Also, froststarisniraalloveragain

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July 5th, 2017, 6:45 pm

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@WiispNightmare:
Eh heh heh poisoned

There are a few sentences in the story that imply Lynxheart doesn't think that Froststar isn't all that bad - in fact, (I may be wrong though) the only part in the story so far where Lynxheart says anything bad about Froststar is when he calls her fox-hearted, but she only will be if she does anything to Coalblaze, which is understandable. :3

Too be honest, though I can't resist my morally ambiguous anti-hero/villains, I think Lynxheart is a lot more like Froststar than Froststar is like Nira, which I'll illustrate in Chapter 5. The only major difference I can come up with for Lynxheart and Froststar is that Froststar is more assertive when it comes to diplomacy and is more "ShadowClan-y" than Lynxheart. Yep, that means that if Lynxheart had Froststar's beliefs, he actually would have killed her just like Froststar did. :3
A key theme, actually, in Lynxstar's Tyranny, is what I'm aiming to express by intentionally making Lynxheart and Froststar (and another cat see if you can guess who)similar.
The fact that they are similar in personality but very different in power and feel very different about each other (also the fact that the audience [you] feels VERY different about the two of them as characters hehehe it's why I asked all those questions) highlights how much perspective is prevalent in society, and how choosing what to have faith in brings out the spotlight to show who is your enemy, and who is your friend.

Also, have a pity list!
These are the top ten cats I pity most at the current point in the story (end of Chapter 4):
1. Coalblaze (or Coal)
2. Twoheart
3. Rubystar
4. Aspensong
5. Froststar
6. Lynxheart
7. Swampshine
8. Shadowsmoke
9. Cypressroot
10.Sandwave

What does your pity list look like?
:3c

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July 7th, 2017, 7:23 am

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@WildfireK: Fluff, Wifi, that's too deep for me at 8:30 in the morn XD
But I sort of get it.

Also, you and morally ambiguous anti-heroes Cx

I pity everyone
:P

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July 7th, 2017, 9:41 am

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@WiispNightmare:
Well, when you think about this stuff like 5 hours a day...

I think too much
Like Lynxheart

(But I'm not manipulative lol)


Hey Wiisp didja see the poems?

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July 7th, 2017, 2:09 pm

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@WildfireK: XD

Yes

(That's good lol)

Which poems are you referring to?

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July 7th, 2017, 6:35 pm

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@WiispNightmare:
I'm referring ti the two poems posted here for Lynxstar's Tyranny :3


You are awesome

Just felt like saying that ^,^

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July 8th, 2017, 7:06 am

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@WildfireK: Oh hey since I looked here it counted as I saw anything new
Yep I'll check those out

O-okay? Thanks?

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July 8th, 2017, 11:11 am

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@WiispNightmare:
Sorry what was that?

Yiur welcome :3

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July 8th, 2017, 11:28 am

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@WildfireK: Because I went to this page to reply to your reply, Smackjeeves said there was nothing new because I'd already checked it.

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July 8th, 2017, 11:34 am

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@WiispNightmare:
Ohhhh thanks for explaining

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July 8th, 2017, 11:35 am

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@WildfireK: Np

I have another cat for you, once I color her.
She's going to have to be in Riverclan :U
Or in no clan, that would work too

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July 8th, 2017, 11:43 am

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@WiispNightmare:
Hmm
RiverClan = cameo
No Clan = Probably major side character

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July 8th, 2017, 11:45 am

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@WildfireK: Ish up to you
She's a really strange cat, cuz she's based off of mine (lol)
Here's the deciding question- On what terms would Riverclan accept an outsider into the clan?

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July 9th, 2017, 3:50 pm

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@WiispNightmare:
Ooh.
Oceanstar is very protective of her clan - this might be a little spoiler, but they've already turned away Nosenose and Pawpaw, and they're trying really hard to be like clan cats. I'm not exactly sure that Oceanstar would accept an outsider - I'm leaning towards unconditional no.

I guess that means she's gonna be a loner then

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July 10th, 2017, 7:16 am

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@WildfireK: Yeap, was afraid of that. (nooo not Nosenose and Pawpaw)
Loner it is!
I may or may not be able to get her ref up, there's a big thing looming ominously irl at the moment that might get in the way >.<
BUT I WILL TRY

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July 10th, 2017, 8:53 am

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@WiispNightmare:

Ohhh nooo ominous big thing ahhhh
XD

Okay sure Whatever, Honestly
I'm interested in seeing her!

I will now hug you~

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July 10th, 2017, 4:20 pm

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@WildfireK: dun dun dun

*gets hugged again*
*flails helplessly*

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July 10th, 2017, 4:27 pm

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@WiispNightmare:
Sorry sorry I should have asked if you wanted one

Also I made an art dump check it out

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July 10th, 2017, 4:30 pm

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@WildfireK: nah it's fine I'm being silly owo

Oooooooh

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August 3rd, 2017, 4:54 pm

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Yay! I think it was the format or something in Figment, but this is easier to read!
I'm gonna read this once I get on my iPad and comment on every. page. >:D

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August 3rd, 2017, 4:56 pm

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@ShadowStalker1128:
OMR YES PLZ DO THAT
(Still on the go lol)

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