Chapter 1-2

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Chapter 1-2

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After they had walked back to their respective dens, a white she-cat with dark grey patches edged towards the fresh-kill. She was followed by a long-legged brown tom. Then, Lynxstar saw Coalpaw and a white tom with one blue and one amber eye pad forward. The four apprentices took two pieces of prey each, diving into their first, saving the other for their mentors. Lynxstar padded forward at the same time Frostfire did, coming from his left. He silently took a seat next to Coalpaw and started to inconspicuously eat the second piece of prey. He was awfully over-aware of Frostfire taking a seat next to the odd-eyed white tom. He silently wished that Coalpaw and Twopaw wouldn’t try and start a friendly conversation, because that would drag Frostfire and him in as well. Thankfully, Coalpaw seemed a bit timid due to their earlier conversation during battle training. Twopaw took no notice of his quietness and began talking to Frostfire instead.
“ShadowClan is beautiful, isn’t it?” Coalpaw asked, though he knew the response. Lynxstar nodded, noticing comfort flow through his blood. Frostfire faded from his thoughts, while Coalpaw and ShadowClan resurfaced. His eyes started to soften and glow with warmth, his posture slowly uprighted itself, and he smoothed out the edges of his figure. Creases and shadows departed from his body. His scent changed from smelling crisp and clean to a semblance of relaxation. Coalpaw noticed and took a conspicuous deep breath, which caused Lynxstar to laugh. He wanted to spend more time alone with this apprentice, to talk. Not necessarily about Frostfire, but just to talk. To laugh. To have fun. To not be worried about a mutiny. He turned to Frostfire.
“Frostfire, would you mind if Coalpaw and I went and patrolled the SkyClan border?” Frostfire shook her head.
“Sorry, I already sent Voidtail and Roserain to do that while you were out battle training.” Lynxstar nodded, but he wasn’t fooled. Frostfire knew he wasn’t fooled as well, but she knew what he would do.
“Oh, sorry. I didn’t know. I guess then Coalpaw and I can just have some time together, now that Coalpaw’s done his apprentice duties,” Lynxstar mewed diplomatically, as Frostfire had predicted. He turned and padded away, saying goodbye with a flick of his tail. Coalpaw bounded after him.
Lynxstar knew that Frostfire was lying. Voidtail and Roserain couldn’t have gone on border patrol. The SkyClan border was farther away from the camp than the ThunderClan border, and Squirreltail, Ashface, and Snowclaw hadn’t been back by the time the two had finished training. To further corroborate the inveracity of Frostfire’s response, Roserain was known to distract almost any patrolling cat in ShadowClan due her tendency to gossip and unbridled curiosity, checking out almost anything remotely interesting on the patrol. There was no way Voidtail and Roserain would be able to do their job in that amount of time. That meant that Frostfire didn’t want Lynxstar and Coalpaw alone. He would be able to confide with Coalpaw privatley, and also gain vital information on Twopaw, especially his weaknesses. Lynxstar anticipated Frostfire making a move to either isolate Twopaw from Coalpaw, or cut Coalpaw off from Lynxstar by keeping him as busy as possible. Lynxstar, in Frostfire’s place, would choose the former because Lynxstar would still be able to grab a hold of Coalpaw during training sessions. Sure enough, when Lynxstar peeked back, he saw Frostfire and Twopaw heading out to hunt some more, ensuring that they were inaccessible for a while.
Lynxstar noticed that Coalpaw was veering towards the elder’s den. If Coalpaw reached it, then the two wouldn’t be able to share private words. Seeing the innocent eagerness in Coalpaw’s frame, however, Lynxstar couldn’t help but give in. After all, it was what he was used to doing.
As Lynxstar made his way through the soft moss of the elder’s den, he saw Ravineraven curled up in relaxation, chatting with Coalpaw, who had reached the den before Lynxstar did. Goldenrod and Foxglove were curled up, resting. Lynxstar settled himself down as Ravineraven told Coalpaw the story of Rubystar.
“Rubystar was a warrior when I was one as well. I was a senior warrior then. At the time, people respected her. She was talented and had quite a way with words. She found herself growing in popularity, so Ospreystar made her deputy. Then, Rubystar raised her reputation with selfless actions and compliments, pandering to everyone’s needs. Soon, cats wanted Rubystar, who then called Rubyshadow, to become leader. She was so popular than Ospreystar agreed to step down so that Rubystar could become leader, thinking she was more suited for the job.”
“When Rubystar received her nine lives, every cat in ShadowClan rejoiced, because she was bound to be a promising leader. After Yarrowstar, they were desperate to clear any traces of tyranny. At the gatherings, however, ShadowClan soon found out how persuasive Rubystar could be, manipulating the other leaders to cede parts of their territories and back away from accusations. Any cat who was brave enough to accuse her of any wrongdoing, soon found themselves facing a cat who would expose every single fallacy of their reasoning. Every time that happened, that cat would leave the gathering in shame, being publicly humiliated and presented as a fool to all the four clans.”
“Growing resentment of Rubystar festered in the other three clans. They viewed her as dangerous. She was too eloquent; She could bend most cats to her will, and those she couldn’t she could reason into humility. She was gaining power; the only time ShadowClan had as much territory as it did during Rubystar’s time was when Brokenstar drove out WindClan. Those who had been shamed began to speak out, and soon the three clans were allied against Rubystar.”
“The cats in the other three clan were not the only ones to become distrustful of Rubystar. Manipulative cats who could humble any cat in their way and break most wills often end up to be tyrants and selfish cowards who use others for their own personal gain. Sol, for example. Haunted by memories of the tortoiseshell tom, Frostfire and a small group of ShadowClan warriors began to become skeptical. Rubystar, like Brokenstar, had risen to power because she was favored by the leader. She gained many grounds for ShadowClan to hunt, like Brokenstar, and could coerce cats to obey her, even other leaders, like Brokenstar. She was manipulative like Sol as well. Such a dangerous combination was Brokenstar and Sol that Frostfire began to plot a mutiny. Though some cats stayed faithful, most felt interested in another vantage point, and offered to look at Rubystar in a different perspective. They never switched back; they feel too deep into their distrust. Soon, Rubystar was the most unpopular cat in ShadowClan. She knew this, and tried to stop it as much as she could. When Frostfire and the rest of ShadowClan suddenly surrounded her in the middle of camp and demanded she step down from leader, she refused, throwing out reason after reason. However, most cats didn’t waver. They converged on her, and she fought mightily. She still had all nine lives left. However, StarClan had decided that Rubystar could not be allowed to live, and that ShadowClan cats deserved a better leader. We overpowered her without losing a single warrior. Frostfire struck the killing blow across her throat. Rubystar is probably in the dark forest now. We’re grateful we acted early, because who know what horrors Rubystar would have committed if she had been allowed to remain ShadowClan’s leader.”
As Ravineraven finished telling his story, he shuffled his paws and relaxed on his moss bedding, looking satisfied with his story-telling. Coalpaw’s eyes gleamed with excitement.
“Ravineraven, that was great! Can you tell me another one, please?” Coalpaw asked eagerly. The elderly dark grey tom guffawed affectionately, shaking his head.
“Sorry, Coalpaw. My voice is a bit tired after that story. I haven’t talked this much in a moon. Usually when other apprentices ask for stories, I give them abridged versions, but I couldn’t help but satisfy you. You’re so adorable!” Ravineraven laughed whimsically, raising a paw to stroke Coalpaw’s muzzle. Coalpaw giggled and tenderly pushed the old cat’s paw away.
“Aw, I’m not a kit, Ravineraven!” Coalpaw imitated seriousness and indignation, but his kit-like giggles punctuated each syllable.
“Respect your elders! Now leave me alone, I want sleep,” Ravineraven responded just as jokingly, rolling over in his bedding to have his back facing the young black tom.
“Okay! I guess I’ll go play with Aspenpaw, then!” Coalpaw exclaimed, bouncing on his feet just like the words bounced on his tongue.
“Right. That was a great story, Ravineraven, well told!” Lynxstar mewed from the back of the den. Touched by the two dark toms’ warmhearted, friendly exchange, he heaved himself to his feet, and at the polite ‘you’re welcome’ of Ravineraven, padded towards the entrance of the elder’s den. Even though the story was accurate, Lynxstar had noticed how Ravinraven had omitted the fact that, while in leadership, Rubystar had made Lynxstar deputy, and when she was killed, Lynxstar had become leader. Suddenly, a burst of emotion came rushing back. Memories of little things, like organizing patrols with Rubystar nodding in approval, or talking about the little trifles of daily life with her, came flooding back. Lynxstar could remember Rubystar’s appearance as vividly as if she were a StarClan cat appearing to him in a dream. She had smooth, impeccably shiny russet colored fur, a heart-shaped head, large gleaming amber eyes, and a reassuring smile. Lynxstar was surprised that he could remember her appearance this well. The warriors that had died during that time had begun to fade from Lynxstar’s memory. But what of her personality? Ever since she died, all Lynxstar knew was a dangerous, manipulative she-cat. What was she like before she died? Her eyes gleamed brilliantly, but what was it behind them that glowed so much? Ambition, or something else?
Lynxstar shook his head sadly when he realized that the figure in his mind that so closely resembled Rubystar was utterly silent. The semblance sat with her tail curled neatly around her, looking at Lynxstar with happiness and peace plastered on her face. However, she said no more than Silentsong, the mute SkyClan deputy. There was nothing to say.
Speak, Lynxstar silently demanded, but Rubystar said nothing. There was no personality in the memory, just a silent shadow. A ruby shadow. Rubystar’s warrior name was Rubyshadow, after all. The real Rubystar had faded into nursery tales and threats made by mothers to frighten little kits into obedience. You better apologize or Rubystar will come get you!
Lynxstar became numbly aware of a feeling of sadness inside him. Why would he feel sad? Lynxstar asked himself this question silently. Rubystar was a dangerous cat. However, Lynxstar knew that the real Rubystar had faded away from his memory. He didn’t know the real Rubystar anymore. He had no idea to make Rubystar fall. Sighing, Lynxstar pushed the thought away. He didn’t want to think about this anymore. Rubystar must have been even more persuasive than she was in the stories told by the elders, to leave a seed of doubt that she was who cats imagined her to be, even after death. Lynxstar tried a second time to stop thinking about Rubystar, but failed once more. Maybe a conversation with Coalpaw would fix his problem. Besides, a silence between Lynxstar and Coalpaw would only be awkward.
“Coalpaw, what are your thoughts on the other apprentices?” Lynxstar asked. Coalpaw could be a valuable tool to convincing the other apprentices to back Lynxstar against Frostfire. Coalpaw beamed innocently.
“Well, I really like Twopaw. He’s a great fighter, and he’s nice too. He likes to teach us his battle moves, which is really fun.” Coalpaw looked up at Lynxstar quickly, hoping that he would approve. Lynxstar nodded thoughfully.
“Go on.”
“I like Aspenpaw too. I like that we spend a lot of time with her, because you and Crowsand are friends.” Lynxstar blinked. Aspenpaw was Crowsand’s apprentice, and he admired the she-cat’s eagerness, which matched Coalpaw. “She likes to play a lot, which is cool.” Lynxstar noticed that Coalpaw used less descriptive words when describing his clanmates, which was good. It meant that Coalpaw saw Aspenpaw and Twopaw and Aspenpaw and Twopaw, creating new words and their definitions in his mind. They were unique, and they couldn’t be described with words, just experiences. Lynxstar felt relieved to know that Aspenpaw would be on his side with Coalpaw.
“Cypresspaw is cool too. He’s nice and stuff. He is also the fastest runner, which is cool. I like racing him because it feels really good when I beat him.” Coalpaw finished, apparently satisfied with his evaluation. Lynxstar nodded, slipping into his thoughts once more. Cypresspaw, Voidtail’s apprentice, could be used to influence him, or vice versa. Though, Frostfire had been spending more time with Voidtail lately. She was already one step ahead, so Lynxstar had to act fast before it was too late. Voidtail was a fine warrior, and if he was against him, then he would be a formidable rival.
A sudden thought wandered into the borders of his mind like a rogue cat who had just entered the forest. Was this what Rubystar thought like when Frostfire had become rebellious? Had she spent hours lost in thoughts, planning on how to appeal to her clanmates? How many cats had she successfully convinced?
Quickly, Lynxstar listed the cats he knew would support him if Frostfire made a move. Ravineraven, Crowsand, Aspenpaw, and Coalpaw. Then, of course, he couldn’t forget himself. Then, Lynxstar listed the cats on Frostfire’s side. Roserain, Frostfire, Twopaw, Yeweye, and Chervileye. Frostfire had him beat by one cat, and were tipping Voidtail and the others to her side. Lynxstar was losing. He had to pick up the pace. It was time his prioritized his goals. First, he would seek to convince Voidtail and Cypresspaw, both through himself and through Coalpaw. Then, he would use Ravineraven’s help to convince the elders. He would work on Snowclaw, the least feisty of the duo of the black tom and Squirreltail, and that would cause Squirreltail to follow as well. Three achievable, helpful goals. Lynxstar was satisfied. At least, for a moment, as a wafting smell of Frostfire and Twopaw’s scent and purposeful splashes echoing through the hazy, dark ShadowClan ground alerted Lynxstar that Frostfire and Twopaw were returning. He had missed his chance to appeal to Snowclaw and Voidtail without having to carry the heavy gaze of Frostfire on his shoulders and feel them shove sentences back down his throat, never to be heard.
In Twopaw’s mouth was a fat, plump mouse. Lynxstar grudgingly admired the tom for his hunting skills. Frostfire had taught him well. In an assessment, Twopaw would fare better than Coalpaw, though, that didn’t mean that the amiable, innocent black tom didn’t have his strengths.
Twopaw and Frostfire set their fresh-kill down on the fresh-kill pile. Frostfire said something to Twopaw, but Lynxstar was too far away to hear clearly. However, as Twopaw trotted off towards the leader’s den eagerly, he could tell that the apprentice probably was dismissed from duties and was willing to hear some stories. That, or charm the elders Foxglove and Goldenrod to erect a political bastion in the elder’s den.
Lynxstar experience a cold, sinking feeling in the depths of his stomach. It wasn’t just something bad he had recently eaten, though. Lynxstar was familiar with this feeling. Frostfire was staring at him.
“Lynxstar, would you be so kind as to take Yeweye and Sandwave out to hunt? We should stock up the fresh-kill pile. It will be leaf-bare soon. I think this leaf-fall is almost over. Lynxstar nodded, not being able to come up with an excuse in time. Instead, he had to give in. Yeweye, Lynxstar knew, was on Frostfire’s side. Since there was no other cat that was aligned with Frostfire and would be able to patrol with Lynxstar without being suspicious, Frostfire chose Sandwave, which puzzled Lynxstar. Sandwave seemed to be leaning towards him slightly. Had he been wrong?
Speaking of Sandwave, Lynxstar could see the sand-colored she-cat emerge from the warriors den, with Yeweye in tow. Like Frostfire, Yeweye’s eyes were blood red. She had a black colored pelt. They padded silently to the clan leader’s side, and without a word, they exited camp. Lynxstar did not look back once at Coalpaw, who remained where he stood. He silently, then Lynxstar heard him softly turn and walk away, presumably to play with Aspenpaw, who stood near the entrance of the apprentice’s den, talking with Cypresspaw.
As Lynxstar weaved his way through the tall pines and the haze, he felt the ground give way to wet, cool water, and the ground turn sandy with sediment. He splashed his way through the water, quietly but not painstakingly so. He could hear the two-she cats plod their way through the murky water. He wasn’t worried about the sound scaring away the prey, however. Almost no prey was found on the small islands on the river delta. No, the best hunting spots were away from the river. Therefore, it didn’t matter if Lynxstar made a lot of noise.
They walked for a little while until Lynxstar could no longer here the tranquil trickling of otherwise stagnant river, and could no longer smell the earthen, woodsy scent of the delta. They were deep into the woods of ShadowClan. To the north was the camp, and to the south was SkyClan’s grounds. Slowing to a halt, Lynxstar mulled a question over in his mind. What should he say to the she-cats? Would it be better to increase relations with Sandwave or Yeweye? Knowing Yeweye’s personality – a sassy, stubborn disposition, and Sandwave’s – a spunky but less prickly temperament, Lynxstar figured that it would be better to talk to Sandwave. Quickly, he set up a plan. He would have them all split up, but intentionally look for Sandwave so that they could talk in private.
Lynxstar motioned for everyone to split up. The silence dragged on; nobody spoke, lost in their own thoughts, and it was not broken by the two she-cats slipping off in their respective directions, with meticulous furtivity. Lynxstar snuck forward, his mind set to hunting mode. With this transition, Lynxstar knew that he would have to cease his plans for subliminal micromanagement and diplomatic games, for if he didn’t he wouldn’t be able to focus, and would be forced to return empty-handed, which would both be an embarrassment and a cause for suspicion.
Lynxstar quickly found some prey exactly where he expected it to be. He knew the place well, and he knew the prey just as much so. Finding no less than two more, he buried the three for later. Satisfied with his successful hunt, he decided that he would now use the remaining time to locate Sandwave.
Using the skills of an expert hunter and diplomat, Lynxstar determined which direction Sandwave headed, and where she would go to find the best hunting in her area. Since he had been to the spot he surmised Sandwave was hunting many times before, it wasn’t that hard to find her. Careful to keep himself downwind of any prey that might be around but upwind of Sandwave, Lynxstar positioned himself in between the trunk of a pine tree and a patch of ferns. He could barely see the sand colored she-cat; she was camouflaged well. Lynxstar sat for a while, letting Sandwave pick up his scent. She turned questioningly to the spot where the clan leader was now emerging.
“Hello, Lynxstar,” Sandwave mewed politely, speaking in a hushed whisper, as she didn’t want to frighten the prey around. Lynxstar dipped his head politely.
“Hello, Sandwave. I’ve already covered my piece of territory, and I had a great hunt – two squirrels and a pheasant. How is yours going?” Sandwave looked impressed. She had never been on a patrol with Lynxstar before, and had never really paid attention to what he brought back from his various hunting patrols.
“Well enough. I’ve caught a squirrel, and I’m just finishing up this area. I wonder how Yeweye’s doing?” Sandwave asked, though she wasn’t expecting a response. Lynxstar gave one to her anyway, just to prolong the conversation.
“Well, knowing her hunting skills, I’d say she would have caught at least one piece of prey, and is about the same in terms of progress as you. After you finish, we’ll look for her.” Sandwave nodded understandingly, and in her eyes Lynxstar could spot a sandy shadow of respect that Lynxstar knew the two she-cats well enough to judge their hunting skills in addition to hunting extraordinarily well on his own.
“Right. Well, I guess I’ll be going, then. I’ve squeezed each last tail-length of usefulness out of this spot. See you in a few, Lynxstar.” With that, Sandwave swiftly sprinted silently away, and within seconds, her sand-colored pelt darkened, became a silhouette, and vanished into the mist. Lynxstar’s shoulders slumped. He hadn’t found an opportunity or excuse to stay with Sadnwave, and the two she-cats were almost done, meaning that the time for conservation was up. On the other hand, Lynxstar had managed to bolster Sandwave’s opinion of him by showing how much he knew and cared for his clanmates. That would help him in times to come. Another important behavior that Lynxstar had observed during their brief but fruitful conversation was the considerably less cold and equivocally decorous yet still respectful and polite demeanor that Sandwave had set forth, unlike Frostfire. Lynxstar seemed to have captured Sandwav’es interest and respect, and quite easily at that. If Sandwave was able to be coaxed that easily, then why did Frostfire choose her of all cats? Perhaps Frostfire had made a mistake, or perhaps Sandwave was an expert at hiding emotions. If so, then Lynxstar had to stay suspicious and choose his words both quickly, cleverly, and carefully, which was no easy task, no matter how much Lynxstar had practiced and planned beforehand.
Lynxstar was soon unaware of the time ticking quickly by, lost in his reverie. Faster than anyone could physically do, plans and auxiliary plans and personalities, information and allegiances and positions of power all were shuffled faster than Flashfoot could run, and still after minutes of pensive pondering, Lynxstar had not reviewed all of them, which frightened him. Everything was happening too quickly; he had so many cats to memorize and analyze and influence and speak to, that the chances of things going arwy were too high for him to take. Yet, Frostfire was still one step ahead of him, which caused more anxiety in him than any other thing. His thoughts morphed into fear and plans to combat that fear, and dozens of blueprints for a safer Lynxstar flew about in a whirlwind so violent it threatened to knock Lynxstar off his feet. The Maine coon tom took a deep breath. Everything so far was going smoothly enough to allow him to avoid dangerous situations.
Suddenly, a pelt brushed up against, making him jump and his fur bristle. Immediately the pelt separated from his spiky, ruffled fur, as Lynxstar turned reflexively to face Sandwave, who carried a frog in her jaws. Eyeing him in a cursory, surprised manner, the sand-colored she-cat dropped the frog on the ground so that she could speak.
“Woah, sorry, I didn’t mean to scare you. I didn’t know you were that jumpy, normally you seem pretty calm,” the she-cat mewed. Seizing the opportunity that presented itself to him like it was a piece of prey, Lynxstar leapt, being the expert hunter he was.
“True, but normally you see me from far away, in the distance. I become much more different when we can talk side by side without feeling the title of leader hang in the air. Besides, good reflexes are key to hunting,” Lynxstar mewed conversationally, changing his posture to show that he was relaxed, as sort of mix between Frostfire posture and Coalpaw posture. Sandwave copied him and relaxed as well, and Lynxstar could see a playful gleam in her eyes, but it was elusive, and Lynxstar still was secretly suspicious.
“I’m sure you are. By the way, what do you think about the apprentices becoming warriors soon? All four of them have shown that they are worthy of becoming one, or at least, they have to me.” Lynxstar nodded thoughtfully. Making Coalpaw a warrior would free the black tom from having to do apprentice duties, which meant that he could focus more on influencing Cypresspaw. On the other hand, making Twopaw a warrior would lend him more influence, and Coalpaw wouldn’t have private training with Lynxstar, where they could talk. That also meant Twopaw wouldn’t have any time either, so the pros balanced out the cons. So, why not make the apprentices warriors? They all deserved it, even Twopaw. Lynxstar smiled. Tonight would be fun.

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August 3rd, 2017, 6:14 pm

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Yaaaay Warrior ceremonies :3

Seems like Frostfire has the upper edge. Lynxstar had better get to higher ground ;)

Although because of your art dump I know what happens. Darn it spoilers >:(

I'm gonna pause here, and read more tomorrow

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August 3rd, 2017, 6:15 pm

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@ShadowStalker1128:
Srysrysrysry
But yay warrior ceremonies!!!!
(Also Lynxie's thought process is flipping complex innit? :D)

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August 4th, 2017, 7:06 am

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@WiFi on the go: it is!
Although you must have thought of it first, since you wrote it down XD
How long did it take to kinda explore all the possible ways the situation could turn out? (In other words how long did it take you to write Lynxstar?)

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August 4th, 2017, 7:48 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
*shrinks back becausw this is gonna sound crazy*

I...
I wrote it on the spot.
Like, I knew the outcome and Lynxstar's attempts to avoid it but I wrote down the reasoning behind it on the spot but I really put myself in his shoes and thought of all the consequences an action would have, and then after making him do something he would provide the same reasons that I had for choosing the things I did in him (but I kept the descicions to his character so I justified some things I wouldn't do ;3)
Sorry if this sounds complex, it's just hard to explain. But what I'd do is come to a big descicion Lynxstar had to make, pause for two seconds, then write XP

Part of this is becasue Lynxstar is an amazing improvisor, so while I wasn't able to improvise the descisions he made, I was able to improvise why - and that made his character that much more realistic :3
(It's like, oh, Lynxstar did this. Now time to figure out why)

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August 4th, 2017, 8:53 am

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@WildfireK: that's cool :D

I like making stuff up at the moment as well XD

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August 4th, 2017, 8:55 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
Yaay we are pantsters
XD

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August 4th, 2017, 9:02 am

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@WildfireK: like
I write something else in the script
But then I'm like 'no this is much better'
Then I change it a million times

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August 4th, 2017, 9:04 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
OH MY GOSH
THAT IS SO ME
LIKE
WOAAAH
(Except I haven't really super changed LT's outline 'cause I still like it)

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August 4th, 2017, 9:05 am

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@WildfireK: WOAH
I GUESS THE ONLY DIFFERENCE IS TAHT YOU CAN WRITE
AND I CANT LOL

(Haha same with the new LoS)

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August 4th, 2017, 9:08 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
Well uh
Um
*thinks about how much we both changed LOS and SaS

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August 4th, 2017, 9:10 am

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@WildfireK: yeah but I like completely rescripted LoS
I mean there are some similarities, so if you read the old version you could tell it's the rebooted version
But after the beginning it's waaaaay different than it was going to be originally

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August 4th, 2017, 9:13 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
Well old Sas was WAY different than old old SaS (sprite comic ver. Ya know) like seriously Nira the ambitious right-hand-man of Rayfi, who wasn't as philisophical or anything like that. They were totally different people! :D

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August 4th, 2017, 9:14 am

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@WildfireK: oh yeah I remember that
Although tbh I was never really into the sprite comic
I think I started reading it more throughly when you changed it handdrawn

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August 4th, 2017, 9:16 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
It sucked.

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August 4th, 2017, 9:18 am

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@WildfireK: tbh I don't even remember anything about it
Except David
I did not like David XD

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August 4th, 2017, 9:20 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
I FLIPPING HATE HIM
Which is wierd because we both like Coalpaw XD

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August 4th, 2017, 9:21 am

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@WildfireK: that's different
Coalpaw is a developed character
David was not XD

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August 4th, 2017, 9:33 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
He was comic relief as a protagonist XP
Don't remind me of him >:(

Since I can't find it again, who are yout top three favorite and least favorite warriors? :D
How would you compare them to Frostfire, Lynxstar, and Coalpaw?

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August 4th, 2017, 9:49 am

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@WildfireK: XD

3 favorites:
1. Ivypool
2. Jayfeather
3. Hawkfrost

(Ugh I don't remember)
3 least favorites:
1. Dovewing
2. Squirrelflight
3. Brokenstar(?)

Honestly, to tell you the truth, I think your characters are very different from all these characters I stated. (I hope Frostfire and Lynxstar are supposed to be similiar because they kinda are)
Like Hawkfrost is manipulative and bends cats to his side (look what he did to Ivypaw) Lynxstar and Frostfire a both manipulative I guess. Although Lynxstar a bit more than Frostfire
But I can't really compare Ivypool with anyone
I mean she's amibitious and uses to be all cheerful and stuff (oh I guess like Coalpaw)
And Jayfeather is super complex. It must be a lot of fun (and hard!) to write a blind character. You have to rely more on the way the character thinks than what the character sees. That's more of your style of writing; all your characters (or at least the ones you show the POV) are super complex because you focus more on their thoughts :D

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August 4th, 2017, 9:52 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
Ooh look at that Shad you struck gold THEY ARE SUPPOSED TO BE SIMILAR I DID THAT INTENTIONALLY :DDDD

I just realized Hawkfrost and Ivypaw - Lynxstar and Coalpaw. Huhhhhh XD jk they're not really similar but they do have their similarities XD
I like how you don't really seem to mind Lynxstar and Frostfire like you don't seem to mind Hawkfrost XD


(Also - I didn't actually get inspiration for Swampshine from Jayfeather, but... ;3)

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August 4th, 2017, 9:55 am

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@WildfireK: Are you kidding? I love manipulative characters! They're the most fun to follow and agree with/disagree with
They're usually more complex and difficult to figure out, which I adore XD

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August 4th, 2017, 10:02 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
Hee hee omr same I love manipulative characters :DDD
And I think you'll really love Lynxstar's Tyranny, then, because there's your fair share of... questionable manipulative characters, and other questionable characters as well. In fact, there are five characters that show very different colors indeed... or are they the same??? ;3 I call 'em the Questionable Quintet. Lynxstar and Frostfire are two of 'em. :3

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August 4th, 2017, 10:03 am

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@WildfireK: ohhhh can't wait to meet the other three >:D

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August 4th, 2017, 10:04 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
Maybe you've already met them...
Maybe not...
Maybe they're right under your nose and were in LTHGS...
;3

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August 4th, 2017, 10:06 am

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@WildfireK: I'm already calling that Coalpaw is one of them
Maybe even Twopaw but who knows we've seen almost nothing of him

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August 4th, 2017, 10:08 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
Who knows what's in their heads?

You'll see more of Twopaw.
In fact, you get a little glimpse of him next chapter!
...
You know what that means~
Go ahead~
;333c

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August 4th, 2017, 10:09 am

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@WildfireK: lol I will! I'm going to take a shower now though

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August 4th, 2017, 10:11 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
Okay dokie

Man I actually haven't written anything for LT in a whole MONTH instead I've been drawing it XD
But now I WANNA WRITE
YOU READ AND I WRITE
Keep in mind that while you're reading Chapter 2, somewhere on Earth, there's this person that's typing new words for you to read~
(And doing Lane Boy kareoke at the same time because I finally got the rap down)

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August 4th, 2017, 10:33 am

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@WildfireK: nice :0

Does me reading it give you inspiration
Oh wow

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August 4th, 2017, 10:34 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
Your analysis of it does :3
And so does yoi reading it :3
And you just existing in genrral XD

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August 4th, 2017, 10:36 am

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@WildfireK: awwwww and thank you!! 0////0
*le bear hug*

You existing gives inspiration too :D

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August 4th, 2017, 10:38 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
*EXISTENTIAL CRISIS RESOLVED*
EPIPHANY
I EXIST TO INSPIRE SHADOW
WHAT A WONDERFUL PURPOSE COULDN'T HAVE ASKED FOR A BETTER ONE


I write 500 words while you were gone ;3
500 new words for you to read!

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August 4th, 2017, 10:40 am

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@WildfireK: ^_^

Yessss 500 words more
Although I should probabaly work on LoS and maybe even Genetics lol
And charge my phone

But then... I SHALL READ
AND POST ALOT OF COMMENTS
CAUSE APPARENTLY THOSE INSPIRE YOU

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August 4th, 2017, 10:41 am

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@ShadowStalker1128:
Okay!! :D
This is the one time I want you to stip talking so mucb because then I'm talking and not writing XDDD

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October 14th, 2017, 8:36 am

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NEW WARRIORS !!! :D

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